Salve!
NaNoWriMo2017 is in full swing, and I’ve finally managed to sit down and pound out a few words. Here’s a brief synopsis of Laurel Emperor, my latest (continuing) project.
As always, criticisms and critiques most welcome (it’s a work in progress after all!)
Current Word Count: 53,002
The flames of war march ever closer to Rome as Primus Imperio and heir-to-the-throne Constantine Tiberius Appius leads his men in the dying days of the most brutal civil war Rome has seen in centuries. Having successfully outmatched the invading Mongol menace in STEEL PRAETORIAN, his legions are now free to focus on the true threat, the main rebel army. But it’s leader is a familiar face, bound up with Constantine’s own history. A man willing to do anything, everything, for power.
As both sides race to develop new technological advances, a shadowy war of assassination and sabotage pits daughter against father, and nephew against uncle. Will Constantine and his loyal allies achieve the long sought breakthrough? Or will the pretender to the throne become it’s permanent occupant? Only the victor will tell in LAUREL EMPEROR.
Modern Papyrus 
Hi Daniel. I’ve come here from The Punk Fiction Authors Guild Facebook Group.
As for the synopsis, on the one hand, it succeeds in giving the impression of a grand story in a complex world, but as for all the rest, it is extremely vague.
I don’t have a clue who the main character is and what his/her goeal is. I don’t have a clue what the main conflict is and I have no idea where the story is going, so I’m in no position to creat expectations.
I’d suggest to make the synopsis a lot more personal and specific. I’ve alwasy been suggested to focus on details when I write a synopsis and while this is less easy than it sounds, when I’ve succeeded, I’ve seen my sunopsis become a lot stronger and more empathinc.
Hope this helps.
Thanks for the feedback! I’ll definitely be looking into adding some more details. I’ll post another new one in a few days when I have a chance to recraft it!